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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Thu Aug 13, 2009 12:06 pm

-Page 11- (3/3)
James basically walks into the rebel base, utilizing a flimsy excuse to get in. Author's annoyance aside, we return to the hidden cave, where the hooded man is revealed to be Hedret. The legendary assassin then challenges Questor to a duel, the gist of which we'll get to next page, sadly. >.> Anyways, back to the rebel base, where Shira wakes up, and is judged for the destruction of the rebel outposts. He pleads guilty, is sentenced to death, AND makes an epic escape, all in the span of a few minutes. Kusa tries to stop him, but the Commandant shoots a jet of flame at him, and runs by the summoner. Shira stops, and sees a paw print, foreshadowing a reunion with Okami. We move to Arblont, where Pe Ell chats with Rutem about why they sent five men to go collect Questor, Par, and Hedret, then talks to Andar about the state of the continent. In the same post, we move to the cave (again. >.<), where Durin finds Par and explains how he came to bring the three of them to Arblont. Par tell Durin that he'll have to wait, as metal clashes in the 'treasure room'. Finally, we move back to the desert, where Luna was walking with Okami, when Shira runs up after them. The girl decides to let him catch up, and the reunion is delayed until next page.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Thu Aug 13, 2009 12:27 pm

-Page 12- (1/3)
Yes, the page starts off with a tearful and emotional reunion, but not one of those B-grade ones, as Shira, Okami, and Luna reunite. After a bit of messing around, the trio (Well, Shira and Luna. Okami can't talk.) decide to head to Bytantum, as they "can go anywhere from there." Back to the cave, for one last time, as Questor ends the duel with moves worthy of a gymnast, before following Durin to Arblont. Anyways, we then move to Jogonho, where Snike reveals his real name to be Dan, and cue flashbacks for Melissa, as she remembers her best friend (and Dan's daughter), Marie. We learn that she had disappeared in a flash of light, coincidentally on the same day as the raid on their village. Anyways, Dan offers Melissa the opportunity to become a rebel, and she reluctantly accepts. He then brings the mage through a portal to the throne room. When she walks through Dan talks to Tukana for a minute or so, revealing (to Melissa) that he knows Cedrine, the Aqua Fault. Afterwards, he brings Melissa to the magic practice hall, and leaves for the sparring hall. We move to Luna, who falls asleep mumbling, ending this part. I'll update in two more posts on the fanfic. >.>
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Thu Aug 13, 2009 3:16 pm

-Page 12- (2/3)
We resume in the desert, where Shira struggles with his inner dark thoughts, deciding to go to the Anaron Swamp, to test out his dark powers. Meanwhile, Kusa is beating himself up over letting Shira escape. Cedrine walks up beside him, and offers the summoner a chance to help her catch Shira, which he quickly accepts. Moving on, we see a flashback of Morgan (Questor) assassinating an activist, then expressing his doubts to Snike. Afterwards, Questor awakens, goes to the temple, and meditates with Andar. The former elven king asks a few pointed questions about Cedrine, which leads Questor to become suspicious. Anyways, viewpoint switches to Luna, who wakes up, and the group continues on to Bytantum. Instead of switching to a characters' viewpoint, we get sent into a flashback, depicting Cedrine's first day on the isle that she was banished to. As in all stereotypical horror movies, zombies attack her in the middle of the night, though the Lord defeats them with her magic. Our story reverts to Kisen, who finishes sparring with his opponent, only to be challenged by Snike. During the fight, it is revealed (officially) that Snike knows Nicole. In the end, the Lord overpowers the thief, comments on how his style is similar to one of his students ten years beforehand, and leaves, ending this part of the summary.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Thu Aug 13, 2009 9:58 pm

Okay, I'm going to take a break off of writing plot summaries, until the fic moves a few pages ahead. So, while I'm off, why odn't we discuss stuff, or rate writers, or something? >.>
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Fri Aug 14, 2009 1:39 pm

Bump, we need moar conversation. >.>
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Fri Aug 14, 2009 1:42 pm

Rate writers:

First writer: SNIKE.

My rating: 9.5/10.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Fri Aug 14, 2009 1:45 pm

Shiranui117 wrote:
Rate writers:

First writer: SNIKE.

My rating: 9.5/10.
I honestly think that I'm not that good, but TY anyways.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Fri Aug 14, 2009 2:06 pm

Shiranui117 wrote:
Rate writers:

First writer: SNIKE.

My rating: 9.5/10.
^QFT
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Fri Aug 14, 2009 3:58 pm

I'll give snike a 8.5/10.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Fri Aug 14, 2009 5:40 pm

I haven't started reading the actual thing yet, but Snike's really good at making fun of how bad other people are at writing in his summaries, so he wins.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Fri Aug 14, 2009 5:51 pm

PeppyWil wrote:
I haven't started reading the actual thing yet, but Snike's really good at making fun of how bad other people are at writing in his summaries, so he wins.
I haven't even scratched the surface. Trust me, some of it is even worse than what my summaries suggest.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Fri Aug 14, 2009 5:57 pm

Haha, I'm sure. Hey, at least we don't have Arcade writing any more. And Shira can actually write posts with stuff in them now.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Fri Aug 14, 2009 5:58 pm

PeppyWil wrote:
Haha, I'm sure. Hey, at least we don't have Arcade writing any more. And Shira can actually write posts with stuff in them now.
Yeah. There's like, next to no one-liners in the new fic. In fact, 75% of the posts are walls of text.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Sat Aug 15, 2009 1:47 pm

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Yeah. There's like, next to no one-liners in the new fic. In fact, 75% of the posts are walls of text.
which is good. otherwise, the story'd be around 10 pages longer o-o
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Sat Aug 15, 2009 2:20 pm

Csquared08 wrote:
Solidix Snike wrote:
Yeah. There's like, next to no one-liners in the new fic. In fact, 75% of the posts are walls of text.
which is good. otherwise, the story'd be around 10 pages longer o-o
More like, 30 pages longer.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Sat Aug 15, 2009 2:24 pm

Solidix Snike wrote:
Csquared08 wrote:
Solidix Snike wrote:
Yeah. There's like, next to no one-liners in the new fic. In fact, 75% of the posts are walls of text.
which is good. otherwise, the story'd be around 10 pages longer o-o
More like, 30 pages longer.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Sun Aug 16, 2009 7:40 pm

hey, how does everyone feel about my including pictures in my posts? if you have a problem, just tell me.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Mon Aug 17, 2009 5:11 pm

btw, no offense to anyone, but when did the IAS become a softcore porn fanfic?
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Mon Aug 17, 2009 5:14 pm

Beats me. >.>
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Mon Aug 17, 2009 5:22 pm

Rolling Eyes just saying.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Mon Aug 17, 2009 6:27 pm

lolol, that's Luna for ya xP
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Mon Aug 17, 2009 6:40 pm

i wish there was a way to include BG music into a post without a giant embed youtube video. i would quote her and but on some other music.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Tue Aug 18, 2009 2:44 am

yeah... I sorta made up for the lack of WoT in the last two posts on the page... >.>
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Tue Aug 18, 2009 8:00 am

Solidix Snike wrote:
yeah... I sorta made up for the lack of WoT in the last two posts on the page... >.>
WoT? I cannot remember what that stands for... >< Dammit...
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Stand discussion topic.   Tue Aug 18, 2009 9:20 am

td260 wrote:
Solidix Snike wrote:
yeah... I sorta made up for the lack of WoT in the last two posts on the page... >.>
WoT? I cannot remember what that stands for... >< Dammit...
Wall of text.
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